First Draft - Feedback

I recieved feedback for the first draft of my opening sequence from three people. They were my friend, brother and sister. They all enjoy thriller films so I believe they were the perfect people to tell me what they thought of the first draft. Below are the pieces of feedback that each of them gave the first draft:

From this feedback, I can deduce that I need to slow down (or refilm) the pans at the beginning of the opening sequence. Also, I need to change the background music as it does not fit in with the thriller impression that I am trying to create with the opening sequence.